Lizzie asks…
beginning wrighter!!!!!!!!!?
ok so im a beggining writer... and i want u to read this and tell me if u would read it... its a vampire romance book.."Kaya come on your bus will be here any minute!" I hear my mom scream, she always likes me to be on time. "Im comeing mom hold up!" I holler while dabbing on my foundation, "I'm coming!" I run down the stairs into the kitchen "Have you eaten yet?" my mom asked. "No," I roll my eyes and go into the pantry, "yes," I pop a cheese-it in my mouth. "ok. now. go." My mom motioned toward the door. "Bye," I mummer while closing the door behind me. WOW, I thought in my mind, my first day of 9th grade, I am finally a freshmen! The bus came and I jumped on with eximent .and sat next to my best friend Emma. "Wow," I looked her up and down, "you look alittle - sluty" I rolled my eyes and laughed. I mean really, she looked like a whore! She was wearing a short, I mean SHORT, skirt with stilettos and a tank top. Not to mention the billion pounds of make-up she slapped on. "Whatever to do to get a boyfriend," she laughed. "Your fuckin' Pathetic, Em" I could see the flash of pain run through her eyes, she suddenly turned awhile and gazed out the window. "So, what do you have first period?" I spoke up. She turned over to me and studied my face for a few good minutes. She narrowed her gray eyes at me,"P.E," the way she spoke was sharp. "M-me too" I looked at her, then down. Luckily the intense bus ride was over, but now I had to go through an intensive first period! Sence we have an extra fife-teen minutes before P.E, I went to my locker and put up a mirror, hairbrush, lip-gloss, and the usual. Ding-ding-ding. "Oh shit, I'm going to be late!" I slam my locker shut and sprint down the hall way into the locker room. "Your late,'' I look over to see Emma laughing with a group of girls in short skirts. "What the hell are you doing?" I asked "Standing what the fuck does it look like?" "No I mean what you are doing with them" "Hangin'" "Wow Em, thirty minuets of high school and your already a whore!" I shrugged my shoulders and throw her a cheesy smile. As I walk away to throw on some gym clothes everyone walked out of the locker room. It suddenly got ice cold, goose bumps fell upon my skin. "H-h-hello? Is anyone there?" My voice echoed back through the empty room. After getting fully dressed I heard a strange voice answer, "Yessss," I gasped to feel a cool chilling breeze run down my spine. "w-what are you doing here? What do you want?" I tried as hard as possible to keep my voice strong with no fear, it didn't work so well. "You have be chossssen" "for what? What do you-"before I could finish my sentence the strange dark figure ran his hand across my cheek, and disappeared. I let out a giant breath that I had been holding in and fell to the floor. I felt around my face to find my cheek. Which I did, but instead of my normal cheek I felt an indent. An indent which was ice old. I finally forced myself off the ground to my feet and sluggishly pulled my body to a mirror, "OH MY GOODNESS!" I screeched. I stared at the reflection of my cheek in the mirror for a long two minutes. My once perfect cheek was now scared! Not like an oh-my-gosh-I-got-a- cut! Instead it was an, oh-my-goodness-I-have-an-ice-blue-colored-heart-shaped-indent- on-my-face! The ice blue color matched my sparkaly eyes. HOLD UP! SPARKILY EYES? WHAT THE HELL IS GOING ON? I ran my hair through my bangs which brought my attention to them. "Oh goody gumdrops," my hair, it's blonde! Like bleach blonde with light honey brown streaks. My whole appearance has changed! "Oh crap, What do I do?" As the last worlds blurted out of my mouth a green ray of light flashed around the room. "Hello daughter," I couldn't see anyone, but I could sure hear them. "Hello? Who are you? I asked "I am Nyx" I heard a voice call out, "I am the spirt that keeps all vampires and muses balances" When I finally turned around to see her, she was beautiful. Her smiled filled the whole room with warmth and joy. Her loose shiney hazel-nut curls traveled all the way down to the middle of her back. Her moss green eyes sparkled and shined ten times more than mine. She was perfect. "So, what your trying to say is," I had to stop and think about what was going on, "Im a vampire? "no," She let out a short laugh, not a mean one, but a warm nice laugh, "you are what we call 'muses' merely young vampires" "Oh," I shook my head letting her know I understood. ...thats all i have so far ..the book is called scarred...and im gonna put in more details thats only the first 3 pages
Our pick of the answers:
First of all, i agree with you. You are a beginning writer. Secondly you need to be able to spell correctly or at least use spell check. #3, i stopped reading after the first F word.
Sandra asks…
I'm hot for teacher!?
rain falls, grey clouds roll over water droplets trickling down my window pane will i see her again here we go again clock is sleeping in dreams dogs have run off with the trains high tailing down China grove can you hear her sigh on some sweet lullaby wearing fishnet stockings and stilettos on song looking through the heat whispered trees I've got it bad, Got it bad, Got it bad, I'm hot for teacher! I"ve got a pencil in my hand some contraband walking around this dream somethings ain't cooking in my kitchen i need to go to China walk that great China Wall i need something to relieve me of this weary hand I've got it bad, Got it bad, Got it bad, I'm hot for teacher!
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Van Halen?
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